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Raw, yet breathtaking
Despite a harsh landscape
Stone by porous stone
Stepping lightly into the horizon
And into a reassuring breathe of air
Raw, yet breathtaking
Crumbling, but not yet ready to give

Dana


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  1. Tess KincaidSeptember 29, 2013 at 11:43 AM

    The repeated line works nicely here...

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    1. Dana DampierSeptember 29, 2013 at 9:33 PM

      Thanks Tess!! I just couldn't resist... had to write about this picture. It speaks to how I've been feeling lately.

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  2. Laurie KolpSeptember 29, 2013 at 12:33 PM

    Stunning, Dana!

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    1. Dana DampierSeptember 29, 2013 at 9:34 PM

      Thank you Laurie!! I'm glad I was able to participate this week!

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  3. BerowneSeptember 29, 2013 at 12:50 PM

    Smartly effective; well done.

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  4. Brian MillerSeptember 29, 2013 at 12:53 PM

    crumbling but not ready to give....
    a lot like life at times eh?

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    1. Dana DampierSeptember 29, 2013 at 9:37 PM

      Exactly Brian... it does describe my life at the moment. Stepping into the future slowly, but steadily even though at the moment it looks very bleak. Thanks!

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  5. Kathe W.September 29, 2013 at 1:41 PM

    this is lovely-and very powerful.

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  6. Julie Jordan ScottSeptember 29, 2013 at 2:00 PM

    Your poem makes the stones turn into sentient beings. How radiant they are now. Thank you for that!

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    1. Dana DampierSeptember 29, 2013 at 9:38 PM

      Awe... your so sweet! Thank you very much for taking the time to stop by and read!!

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  7. brenda wSeptember 29, 2013 at 2:03 PM

    Your poem is raw, yet breathtaking. :) I love the repetition of that line, and the starkness of the landscape your words paint.

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    1. Dana DampierSeptember 29, 2013 at 9:41 PM

      Your comment has made me so very happy... that's exactly what I was trying to convey! Thank you very much!!

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  8. J Cosmo NewberySeptember 30, 2013 at 6:08 AM

    A harsh landscape in all respects.

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  9. Kristen HaskellSeptember 30, 2013 at 5:36 PM

    One word seems to capture the spirit of this poem for me "life"

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  10. Lucy WestenraOctober 1, 2013 at 1:01 AM

    I know the landscape and you have it just right.

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  11. UnknownOctober 1, 2013 at 4:15 AM

    Wonderful imagery!

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  12. ~T~October 2, 2013 at 2:45 PM

    Great description! I like the idea of the stones stepping lightly.

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  13. Susan AndersonOctober 2, 2013 at 3:31 PM

    I think I am crumbling but not ready to give more often than not.

    Great line.

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  14. TruedessaOctober 4, 2013 at 5:57 PM

    Raw yet breathtaking..the repetition works well..

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