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Sketch my heart
In charcoal
Portraying the scars
So others may point judging fingers
Like winter hardened twigs

 Flaws
Bold in black
Beauty
Buried in shades of gray

Spectators trace my charred lines
Smudging them...
As my memory blurs
From your thoughts
Affixing me with the unimportant
Like we never were...

Dana

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  1. Brian MillerMay 14, 2013 at 3:55 PM

    dang...you really bring on the emotion as you go along in this...love the drawing of the heart...letting others touch your scars and them smearing them...but what a whumph in the end there...

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    1. Dana DampierMay 14, 2013 at 4:11 PM

      Thank you so much Brian! I'm really proud of this one. It came at me and begged to be written!

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  2. henna inkMay 14, 2013 at 4:11 PM

    This is pretty much awesome. I especially like these:

    "Sketch my heart
    In charcoal"

    "Flaws
    Bold in black
    Beauty"

    "As my memory blurs
    From your thoughts
    Affixing me with the unimportant
    Like we never were"

    Excellent, so-very-sad ending.

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    1. Dana DampierMay 14, 2013 at 4:14 PM

      Thank you very much! I really appreciate you stopping by to read!

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  3. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerMay 14, 2013 at 5:25 PM

    Emotional write--the last bit just grabbed me--really well done!

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  4. MaryMay 14, 2013 at 5:56 PM

    This saddens me. Especially the "Like we never were." And the pointing of fingers. Yes, truly sad.

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    1. Dana DampierMay 14, 2013 at 8:48 PM

      It definitely is a sad situation written directly from the heart. Thank you Mary!!

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  5. Laurie KolpMay 14, 2013 at 9:26 PM

    This is a stunning poem... I especially like the first stanza, Dana.

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    1. Dana DampierMay 15, 2013 at 12:21 PM

      Thank you Laurie!! I appreciate your comment!!

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  6. ClaudiaMay 14, 2013 at 11:29 PM

    Affixing me with the unimportant
    Like we never were...oh hecke...what a tight close...a very emotional write dana

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  7. AnonymousMay 15, 2013 at 12:56 AM

    Wow! This is starkly beautiful and packed with emotion. You did very well!

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    1. Dana DampierMay 15, 2013 at 12:26 PM

      Oh Jo, thank you for coming to visit. I do appreciate your opinion!!

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  8. TCPCMay 15, 2013 at 1:19 AM

    The way you chose to spell Burned and not burnt talks with the verses...as if living in the traces left!

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    1. Dana DampierMay 15, 2013 at 12:40 PM

      Yes, the wounds are still very fresh. Thanks Akila!

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  9. GraceMay 15, 2013 at 7:51 AM

    The opening lines grabbed me ~ Searing write here with that image too ~

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