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Like lily pads upon the water
I float
Upon your pool of madness
I ride the waves
Of your emotions
And decorate your
Existence
But just once
I'd like to bask in the glory
Of the sun
Without you

Dana

~ Written for dVerse Poets Pub
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  1. ClaudiaNovember 17, 2012 at 2:58 PM

    smiles..in every relationship there are def. times when we need a bit space, spend a bit time on our own and then even more enjoy the time together again..

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  2. DaydreamertooNovember 17, 2012 at 3:00 PM

    Ohh... yes, we all need our own space to simply just allow ourselves to 'Be' with no-one calling on us for any needs to be met.
    So much said in this. Lovely imagery.

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  3. TashtooNovember 17, 2012 at 3:02 PM

    oh...there is so much truth in that final line...in my world...if I were to make such a fantastic statement...it would be taken personally and I would be faced with an impenetrable wall of silence...a careful what you wish for passive aggressive stance to teach me a lesson...yup...I figured out how to get my alone time ;) Loved the play to the prompt...awesome!

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    1. Dana DampierNovember 18, 2012 at 12:02 AM

      I face the same issue most of the time which is what this poem is about. It all depends on what I'm going to be doing during my alone time that decides if I'm going to be made to feel guilty or not.

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  4. Brian MillerNovember 17, 2012 at 3:02 PM

    oh snap....yeah its hard to ride those waves for so long...and the need to have that break just to breath...to maybe be on your own a bit in the sun...felt piece...

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    1. Dana DampierNovember 18, 2012 at 12:07 AM

      Yes, rarely do we as stay at home moms get an actual break from mommy life to be something other than that. There is more to us than what we do all day. To be free of those responsibilities for a short while is very important so that we may be the best we can be when we are taking care of them.

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  5. ScarletNovember 17, 2012 at 3:13 PM

    Nice spin ~ I like that bold cry for independence in the pools of madness ~

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  6. Laurie KolpNovember 17, 2012 at 3:25 PM

    Powerful ending...

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  7. MaryNovember 17, 2012 at 3:37 PM

    Yes, everyone needs and deserves their own spotlight, not sharing someone else's or simply paying homage to someone who has it.

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  8. AnonymousNovember 17, 2012 at 4:26 PM

    haha nice turn. very beautiful poem, dana...

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  9. AnonymousNovember 17, 2012 at 4:41 PM

    Ah. that is hard! Well described though. k.

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  10. henry clemmonsNovember 17, 2012 at 7:09 PM

    Dana, I love the way you protray lilly pads, their floating above. I love them in paintings, and image in writing. Such a well written piece.

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  11. UnknownNovember 17, 2012 at 7:16 PM

    Powerful emotion in such a compact space, well done!

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  12. marousiaNovember 17, 2012 at 8:47 PM

    I hear you - sometime we need our own time just to be... beautiful poem

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  13. Beth WinterNovember 17, 2012 at 9:54 PM

    Even when two people complete each other, each needs those moments of solitude. Beautiful.

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  14. Dana DampierNovember 18, 2012 at 12:10 AM

    Thank you to everyone for your awesome comments and I really appreciate you all stopping by to read!

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  15. AnonymousNovember 18, 2012 at 4:42 AM

    A pretty poem, with thoughtfulness and a desire for space inhabiting the words ~ quite awesome in its simplicity, yet ... tragic in a way.

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  16. Maude LynnNovember 18, 2012 at 9:09 AM

    Succinct and powerful. I really like this.

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  17. ayalaNovember 18, 2012 at 10:08 AM

    Lovely write, Dana.

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