From The Start... I Knew
Edgy vibes drip like sweat from your skin
And leave traces of a lie on mine
Rendering me cold
As we shake hands for the first time
You don't know...
But that's all I needed
To know
To stay away
Shifting from one foot to the other
Attempting to hide your real you
I see you scan my possessions
For tasty morsels
A hicked up Alan Jackson
With mistrustful eyes
That I can instantly discern
Strives to pour on the charm
It is my gift to see
To feel
That your an ass
And nothing more
Dana
~Written for dVerse Poets Pub
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And leave traces of a lie on mine
Rendering me cold
As we shake hands for the first time
You don't know...
But that's all I needed
To know
To stay away
Shifting from one foot to the other
Attempting to hide your real you
I see you scan my possessions
For tasty morsels
A hicked up Alan Jackson
With mistrustful eyes
That I can instantly discern
Strives to pour on the charm
It is my gift to see
To feel
That your an ass
And nothing more
Dana
~Written for dVerse Poets Pub
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sometimes we know from the first moment we meet someone and i think it's good to trust our inner voice here, yet still try to be open-minded enough to prove them we've been wrong.. happened with one of my colleagues at work, had a very bad impression when i first met him but after getting to know him better, really changed my mind
ReplyDeleteI always give them the benefit of the doubt, but I've never been wrong yet. In this case,I am right to stay away. My nieghbor is nothing but trouble in a charm filled package.
Deleteohh!! great write!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteTrust your gut instinct!
ReplyDeleteYou bet I will! I can sniff out a creep a mile away.Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteI am glad that you can see very quickly behind the false charm. Best to run away from such people ~
ReplyDeleteOh yes, I've encountered enough of these jerks to not even think twice!
Deleteoh snap...smiles...yes you can tell right from the beginning at times about people...nice use of alan jackson to cover a lot of description for you as well...
ReplyDeleteHe looks almost exactly like Alan Jackson which works in his favor(most of the time). Alan Jackson has better teeth and manners though!
DeleteI am pretty good at reading people on first meeting - not always correct but mostly. It is a good gift to have...and a gift to write of it so well.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Thanks! I've not been wrong yet, but I always give them a second chance to change my mind.
DeleteOh yes...gotta trust the gut there! Just a wonderful peep through your eyes at QUITE the character. My skin still crawls!
ReplyDeletealways best when you can pick 'em out from the start.
ReplyDelete'a hicked up Alan Jackson..." run girl, run. Kinda says it all, but the rest of the poem removes any doubt--great little cameo of a predator, and those vibes that can't be ignored.
ReplyDeleteYou are good!!!!!
ReplyDeleteSometimes there is gold under that layer of brown sediment, sometimes not!
ReplyDeleteA nice assemblage of words nonetheless. I liked "mistrustful eyes".
Ha... great ending!
ReplyDeleteThis gives me a sick feeling because it reminds me of a sociopath kind of character a lot like someone I dated once--only I didn't heed that warning voice. Way too charming. Nicely portrayed, Dana.
ReplyDeleteThat's how me makes me feel... not right. There's something about him that creeps me out every time I see him. He's my neighbor so it's hard to totally avoid him!
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