Untouchables
Suited up
Smelling of cigars
And Whiskey
Gangsta knowledgeable
In the old
City of lights
Where everything
Appears black and white
But we know better
Shades of red
Splatter in the newly paved streets
As it rains from the sky
Untouchable
Only a for a moment
Cause it's a figment of your imagination
Dana
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Gangster and gangster land beautifully captured. Sinister, dark and very good
ReplyDeleteThanks! I love those old Gangster movies so I had fun with this one.I appreciate you stopping by!
DeleteGangsta knowledgeable
ReplyDeleteIn the old
City of lights
I love these lines, and how it can elude to New York or Chicago. Which both at one time had fellows with such knowledge.
Yep! You have it right. I was referencing both cities which were known for their gangsta's!I couldn't make my mind up to which one it would be. Thanks for coming by!
DeleteI enjoyed the connections you made in this poem, Dana. Your journey through imagination was vivid. Thank you for sharing this. =D
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda for the support and encouragment!
Deletei like the play on words "where everything appears black and white"
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verification makes it really hard to comment. you'd get more comments if you turned it off. i had to do this several times to get it to work.
Thank you! We all know life isn't just black and white, but there are a few periods of time where it certainly seemed that way.
DeleteI recalled that movie Untouchables ~ There are lots of crimson red behind those gangster moves ~ Enjoyed it ~
ReplyDeleteThat's exactly what came to my mind when I saw the picure. I love that movie! Thanks for stopping by to read.
Deletenice...the blad and white and red....i like that, gives it a noir feel...like a frank miller comic....nice verse...
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian!Back when the Mob ruled the city streets, those were the colors that represented life.
DeleteNice twist at the end with the imagination...
ReplyDeleteHa... they thought they were so untouchable!Thanks for the comment!
DeleteLove the shades of red stanza!!
ReplyDeleteYa, back then the streets were filled with spilt blood.Thanks Hannah for coming by to read!
DeleteI love this ... figment of your imagination ~ a great line!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Helen for stopping by to read.I appreciate the comment!
DeleteNever fiction! I believe I have met him before!
ReplyDeleteHaha... thanks Karen for stopping by.
DeleteWell done. I especially liked these lines...
ReplyDeleteWhere everything
Appears black and white
But we know better
=)
Thanks Sue! I had fun with this one.
DeleteHey! Hey! Dana that was sharp and suited to the prompt. I could see the red through your words myself!
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